Прекрасный перевод! На мой взгляд - даже лучше оригинала:

Had I the heavens’ embroidered cloths,
Inwrought with golden and silver light,
The blue and the dim and the dark cloths
Of night and light and the half light,
I would spread the cloths under your feet:

But I, being poor, have only my dreams;
I have spread my dreams under your feet;
Tread softly because you tread on my dreams.

В оригинале прекрасные метафоры, но рифмы на уровне любовь-морковь.


Кстати, Батлер должен быть благодарен Эквилибриуму за пиар ))))